My beach holiday. I am learning to try use more speech marks more story and use more punchy sentences.

This is my recount story about the school holidays. I learned how to use short punchy sentences but not properly. I am also learning to add detail to my story and start sentences with adverbs.

My beach holiday.

It was a beautiful spring Friday afternoon when we traveled to Omapere for Nannie Annie's one year. When we got to the gate I could just feel the jolliness pumping through my heart, I was so excited to see my dad's family. I could see the water straight down off the veranda. It was tremendous.

Have you ever felt the waves rushing over your head like the shower water? Well I have and it wasn’t that amazing, what I mean is it was a hot windy day and me Carlos and Dylan were swimming in the waves like little tiny fish, The water at the beach was amazing but it was colder then Antarctica. When I jumped out, it was about five o'clock.

A few minutes later all we could hear was “Kai time” shouted aunty Moana. Carlos my dad Dylan my mum and I all  rushed to the house, there was burgers, fish, boil up and for dessert we had cookies and cream ice cream,chopped peanuts,whipped cream and the amazing chocolate sauce. It was better than anything else in the world, it was like rainbows were melting in my mouth!, it was a dream you could die for.Lovingly It was delicious.

After Kai we talked about what we could do. “Rudely I shouted yep let's play Charades now”. Now it was Dylan’s turn.The first category was Disney princesses, Cinderella, glass shoe, home before twelve o'clock, “CINDERELLA, shouted Dylan. YES”, Snow, white, the queen, white is in her name, “SNOW WHITE, Yes. Time is ticking I respectfully said”. next up  guess the face. “Kevin our group answered in so much laughter yep, next Tehanah, Yep” I was so embarrassed of myself. Next “Moana answered team red answered with cheerfulness building up in their stomachs”, yes correct up next  “Dylan, Yes, Hare,No,Sue,yes”. A couple faces later it was about one o’clock and time for bed. I felt so so weary after the game of guess the face. Merrily I skipped off to my bed.

Happily I really enjoyed my holiday with my dad's family.

Animals,Big and Small.

This week I was learning to make up poems about animals that shows assonance and use the correct homophones for Their,there and They're. I learnt how to make amazing poems showing assonance
My next step is to learn about alliteration and include it in my poems.